wow

I think this is my favorite poem you've done. I'm interested in finding out what kind of background picture you'll use. That's if you use one.

My favorite line is "Her tongue was a bow on my violin. We made music." Just a metaphor (it's a metaphor, right?) I've never heard before. It's refreshing. I don't believe I've heard the leg one either. So bravo! Nice work.

I'd do one of those huge smiley icons where the face has a HUGE grin but I don't know how to work those damned things...thanks so much!

As for a background photo, I think this poem might be too descriptive for the kind of visual poetry I do...if I make this into a visual poem, I'd probably have to commission someone to do a shot that I'd have visioned...because I think I could search all of deviant art and not find the picture I'd want for this one...

So what kind of photo do you want?

Probably a worm's eye shot of a couple in the background. They aren't kissing yet, but they're close (either that or full on French kissing, but it all depends on the lighting). They're against a wall, I'll say on the left of the shot. She has both arms wrapped around his neck and one tilted over his head, caressing his hair or something. He'll have one arm firmly clutching her waist and another (particularly the arm behind her in the shot, the right) pressed against the wall. She's also pressed against the wall and her right leg is wrapped around his left leg, with her heel at his knee. And in the foreground, right in front of the camera (but still able to show the couple) would be a freshly lit cigarette, still smoking.

About the lighting, I'm not really sure what I'd want for that, but probably coming from the background so the couple would be darker and thus more sexy.

The location would be a street with a brick wall and a lamp post. The great thing about worm's eye shots is that you won't see much other than what you want to see, so all that would be showing would be a sidewalk, the wall, the couple and the cigarette.

This is amazing.
I really love it :]

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I love the lines -
"Our legs intertwined like vines and a fence.",
"Her tongue was a bow on my violin. We made music." and "Our lips interlocked...time froze
And sped up as if in sync with each other."
Those are so lovely <3
Woah, great work.

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Thanks! This is probably one of my favorite poems. I'm glad you liked it and thanks for the fav!